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Chapter 3

🕑 Added 2025-03-22 07:53:29 +0000 UTC

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Editsuggestion: „If I weren’t trying to win them over and build my influence for the future, I wouldn’t even bother with them. A bunch of weaklings—complaining about sleeping outdoors? How do they expect to cultivate „to/till“ immortality?“ „Meanwhile, Wang Ze’s group finally woke up after a „nearly“ sleepless night.“ Or add, that they only could sleep after sunrise. „The air quality in the Eastern Region was far better than in his past life. Even the air he breathed in felt sweet.“ 2 times back to back mentioning the air quality isn’t that good. Maybe talk in the first sentence about higher qi density and refer to his earlier life in this world, in a different region. If mortals can perceive qi in your story. The contrast between the travelers is amusing, though Han Luo has to come from a very rich background if he has all of those supplies.


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