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Chapter One Hundred and Sixty-Three. The Welcome Wagon.

🕑 Added 2021-09-12 07:55:47 +0000 UTC

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Richard Reid

This one was just riddled with errors

Leigh Ganschow

the light infusing him flashed incandescent, the disappeared, - - - > the light infusing him flashed incandescent, then disappeared,

Leigh Ganschow

I'm not a paragon of punctuation, but I think there needs to be a capitalization..... forgotten his brothers, the men he led and served with," Eric replied firmly, "we swore an oath to defend our country, and if that means fighting monsters, well," he chuckled, "every Marine is a rifleman." - - - > I think maybe capitalize We. It's the first word after the period. Er.... maybe there needs to be a period after firmly?

Leigh Ganschow

"Nothing," Waters shook his head, "just, well, look, you gotta know what you like, right?" - - - > "Nothing," Waters shook his head, "just, well, look, you gotta know what you look like, right?"

Casey

Ug I just caved to the promise of more chapters and I’m already out haaa… Marines good choice. But I started on 143 and am already out and still can’t wait for more keep up the great work.

Leigh Ganschow

Wates piloted the car off the highway ---> Waters piloted the car...

Leigh Ganschow

Actually, in the Metallica song it's "land mine" not "land mines"... because I assume the soldier only stepped on one land mine; not multiple land mines.

Leigh Ganschow

"This cart has seven hundred horses under the hood," Waters's (I think the comma after "hood" should be a period.)

rgreads

So about that dance...

Andrew

Thank you!

Morton

I warmed it up for you πŸ€—

Andre Washington

^_^

Philipp Arz

Reincarnating is a privilege of the clergy and they only got 2 full fledged clergy members to help them. For cost I got no idea

Torauth

Another great chapter as always. Question though - would reincarnating a person restore things like lost limbs/cure cancer? If so, would it not be more crystal-efficient just to reincarnate everyone?

Craxuan

You've just been denied entrance to Heaven, and your appointment with your late wife may have been extended indefinitely, but don't worry, it's all going to be okay. (I'm joking)

Mr. Bigglesworth

MY THRONE RETURNS. MUAHAHAHAHA!


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