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Rebirth as a Wind Cultivator - Chapter 80

🕑 Added 2024-12-07 20:48:00 +0000 UTC

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Erios909

Thanks for the comment. I probably should add something about them, you're right. Probably at the beginning of the breakthrough chapter and thanks for the suggestion on this chapter! this is near the end of the first book (we are at 190k words), but the word count is really close to the maximum, so I'm trying to get it all to fit without having to go through and do any heavy content cuts anywhere :"D

Federico

Did she use the various elemental pills? I don't remember reading it. A suggestion: "The inn’s balcony offered a perfect view of Aeris’s bustling eastern gate." They discussed of staying outside, but the text skipped over everything regarding that and there had been dialogue before this. I would add a 'choose' of some kind here like "The balcony of the chosen inn offered a perfect view of the busy eastern gate of Aeris."

Lijwent

Maybe she will / would become the Phoenix princess during the next five years?

Lisfer

I really like the crafting aspect (small as it is) because I would absolutely be doing something like that if I were in that situation.


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