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Mercenary of Lastia - Beyond the Last Hearth - Ch 1-4

🕑 Added 2024-05-15 04:35:33 +0000 UTC

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Erios909

The cart was the first time it was overt enough to force her to change her direction like that.

Frick Yu

Thank you! I think its pretty solid so far and am definitely excited to see more chapters! I am curious: the first time we see Lys's keen instincts at work, is that the first time she experienced or noticed it? Cause I can get why she would ignore it if so: Lys being a teenager who is just developing this skill and hasn't realized there's consequences for ignoring her intuition.

Caleb Bear

Emil is the cowardly friend and Caius is the bully. Otherwise I agree, that would be very realistic.

The_fourthPillar42

Very much enjoyed it!!

Aphanvahrius

Interesting. I wonder if the reason why she will have to flee is because she brutally murders everyone here and then is found feasting on their corpses by a random passerby 🤔

Jonathan Wint

Lys was stupid for not listening to her instincts it makes me like her less. You should of had her more suspicious maybe have those instincts kick in when she sees Emil. Maybe he be less of a Bastard by telling her it's a Trap and they will ruin his dad if he did not do it. Then she could CHOOSE to confront them and not realize he has backup up and she not be a Mary Sue and be just as stupid but for arrogance, not stupidity. You could still have Emil run away making him a coward but not a lying piece crap. And it would feel more real. (It looks like they're planning to gang Rape her.) Even if it's just a Beating Emil could not know that and would have to suspect that Rape was the REAL PLAN. This makes him the most Vile Piece of Shit in creation. Because if it was just a beating Emil could not know that. Caius even if he rapes her successfully is not as bad as Emil because Emil choice was COLD cowardly and done with knowledge that this could be a beating rape gang rape murder or Selling her into Slavery. A Person who was 's only Friend. He knows that Caius's word can not be trusted. For Emil to descend to that Level that quickly and Learn how to lie that easily does not seem realistic. You could make the Betrayal just as bad with him running away and keeping Quiet and making it more realistic. Dyslexia retype...Ty caleb bear!

JHD

Thanks for the chapters, like it so far.


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