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Demoness 2 - Chapter 63 - Dropping It

🕑 Added 2024-03-13 04:11:12 +0000 UTC

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Aphanvahrius

"With it active and [Power] enhanced, she was almost undetectable until the last second |with it was far too late| and she was already upon them." Feels like something's not right with the fragment in the ||. Maybe "when" instead of "with it"? "as long as she maintain a certain altitude" Probably should be "maintained" "She started to pull from her bracer, and finish the job herself." Something feels off about this one too. Maybe "She started to pull a shard from her bracer to finish the job herself."? "The water all around flash vaporized" Should probably be "the flash"

Aura

Or he could be mature, accept her decision, and continue respecting her as a friend. Hoping he’s dead to save a patch of interpersonal awkwardness in the story is a bit extreme 😂 . He’s always struck me as a rational and mature character. Also he’s been important in the story and to Yolani. I’d be boring for him to have simply died “off screen” at some point.

Shelbo

God I really hope Henri is dead, I really don’t want him to become the “How could you do this to me after every I did for you” kind of dude towards Yolani to assassinate his character I really like him. It’ll be a lot smoother for the story (and me) if he’s just dead


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