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Chapter 15B – Trap and Rescue

🕑 Added 2023-04-20 05:07:51 +0000 UTC

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Jonathan Wint

I really hope some of them survive just so they can look at Elis who might be a NAI or cybernetically enhanced with nanites and best friends with essentially the monster's daughter. Ooh the Sparks that will fly! Oh God I want to see that!

Erios909

Yes the armory bit will need to be changed in book 2 to account for the changes in this

Jonathan Wint

Several million survivors after the battle are cryogenically frozen by the time Elis and Alex get back with might be less than a hundred and only if they stayed frozen. Sounds like one of the drones became awake and took over

Treviisolion

That implies that someone or something is doing that. There shouldn’t be any reason for the Federation drones to turn on their creators.

Aphanvahrius

I think the situation with Elis's team was a bit different. They died after Alex took them in and while being in her care. Here, those people died before she even got to them. I can easily see how the former could couse a way stronger emotional reaction.

Merlin's Fan

I enjoyed the rare view from Elis in this addition, but you might want to make a bit checks back to earlier chapters. There's one I'm thinking of where Elis mentioned wanting to look at the armory logs after they've escaped the unknown system and she "discovers" the suits, might be a bit out of place now. There's now also Alex kinda blowing off the deaths of the 2nd and 3rd humans she's met, where she was pretty hard on herself just by losing Elis' mates cyropods, overall great story telling seeing Elis' view

Aphanvahrius

Great chapter! It provides a very interesting background to Elis's situation, namely, that her team was not a special case, but simply one that got lucky to stumble upon a friendly NAI (enemy) instead of a bunch of murderous drones (allies). Quite beautiful irony really. Now, to be picky about something, the line "Open fire with our railgun!" feels a bit off, considering it's said at the moment of entering the weapon's range. Like, it's more fitting for an order you'd give before engagement, while in a tense situation, such as here, when you want shots fiered right at that moment a shorter version like "Fire the railgun!" would feel more natural imo.

Erios909

there aren't survivors for long -- the drones are murdering them all after being awakened

Jonathan Wint

Seems rather grim at there being survors in hibernation other than elis and seems kind of strange that the drones would destroy cryogenic chambers that were out of date codes.


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