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Chapter 54 - Dungeon (Part 1) / Lesser Demon

🕑 Added 2021-03-21 22:20:32 +0000 UTC

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Franananachi

It almost feels like the end of a book and the start of another, where the new book doesn't immediately answer all the questions left dangling at the end of the old book but starts off in whatever the new normal is. I like it a lot, though it seems like some perspectives on the fallout of the disaster from other characters might be needed to have some resolution before the time skip so it feels less abrupt.

Franananachi

Can the contract even be cancelled if there's no cancellation terms specified?

Erios909

I'm trying to add flashback snippets. It feels like the best way without getting stuck in a rewrite quagmire.

Midjji

Yeah there really needs be a 51.5 a 52.5 and so on

bob barker

I'm also curious about what she did during that time.

Erios909

I guess i will try to figure out how to write the two weeks between

Craig

Was there a chapter that was skipped or something? I just signed up for patreon and the story seems like it jumped ahead and I’m trying to figure everything out

Mai0e

Yes! Last chapters time Skip was just plain bad. I would suggest a rewritte ...

bob barker

*cough* Reactive Adaptation

lenkite

Would be really nice if all the missing chapters in the time skip were filled in. How did she get the job ? What is her job ? What is this training regimen ? Stuff like: "because last time, she’d been hovering just over empty on her Power gauge with only a few charges from Yolani’s manashards to keep her going." When was this "last time" ? A time skip is introduced to skip repetitive parts of a story. Important plot points that educate the reader should NOT be part of a time skip. If a time skip was needed, it could have been done post the battle aftermath and her getting a job.


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