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A Lion for a Lion- Part 2 (REVISED)

🕑 Added 2025-02-01 20:10:50 +0000 UTC

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Nova Sana

This version certainly has him as a more active or assertive protagonist. Whether it’s actually better or not I think depends on how dark vs light you intend to make this version of Harry. Please choose the version that best fits the arc you have planned for the character.

vprogram

Both the original and revised versions are fine in my book, curious how this will proceed since a harry ok with servant quarter and an emperio casting one are very different

John

Not gonna lie, I think you should have left it alone. My Thoughts, Tywin's treatment of Harry, I feel, isn't too far away from what we see canonically. In the books he had little care for anything that wouldn't benefit House Lannister. He also had no problems treating others who were his social equals as tools/ chaff. In regards to Harry, previously I felt that you left plenty of room for him to grow into a proper player. Here it feels wrong. Like Harry's been broken at his core and didn't get the memo as to why. Gotta get this out too, I like most of your stories. I'm here on patreon because I love the way you write. You clearly have a direction planned for anything you write. And I feel as if you got a little bullied into rewriting chapter two. Sorry if the thoughts are a little disjointed, my brains weird.

GhostnKC

The rewrite felt a whole lot better. I enjoy the " I'm done taking shit" Harry when he isn't a dick about it. I have to agree that with Tywin knowing that Harry is a lord that measure of respect should have been shown from both sides. Otherwise I hope to read more of this

MN01

Better though I a slight edit to the line about insulting him could be simply "It was unwise to give a Wizard his wand, then insult him in the same meeting...Lord Tywin." Maybe also give a last name as well since there was no reason to not give him one. Having a last name implies Nobility or at least being of higher status in Westeros than just a regular peasant. Also slight change to the address to imply a more equal social standing between the parties. And make this feel more like a talk between two nobles the longer this conversation goes on. Especially, since Tywin pegged Arya to be a noblewoman just from the way she spoke. In addition, its all part of noble courtesies. Instead of things like calling him Lord every few sentences, call him by his title and his name of Lord Tywin. And let Tywin address him as Lord Harry. (Just a note that not all Nobles have to possess lands to still hold title, he'd be considered a landless noble but still a noble.) Directly controling Tywin from the getgo might not also be strictly needed as like with Kevan, he could have modified their memories of the meeting to make it more favorable. But Imperius victims can be made to act like they are mostly normal while still carrying out their instructions. And with Tywin under his control, Harry could definitely shift things to be much more favorable to himself without drawing suspicion. Not to mention, Harry could now gain direct access to Aerys to grant him things like the titles and the combined lands of Tarbeck and Castmere and have Tywin rubberstamp it. Then modify Aerys memories to make it seem like it all Aerys idea, maybe even arrange for Cersei to marry Harry to seal the deal so to speak and then modify his memories to make it all seem like something Aerys did as a slight against Tywin for daring to presume he could have thoughts of his line marrying into the Targs, but that Twyin twisted to blow up in Aerys face since Harry's magic is a huge boon to the West. Seems like the sort of thing the two former friends would do to each other and so would be rather plausible.


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