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The Nyanny - Ch 14

🕑 Added 2024-08-27 05:21:22 +0000 UTC

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Rinnii Art

This made me laugh so hard, I love the long comment and replies to scenes. Thank you! <3 She was planning to get a non-livein Nanny cos Finn will be starting school and stuff so she can do drop off and then the Nanny can pick them up till Adora gets home from work.

Rinnii Art

lol, there is still some time before that happens 💗

Kat

I was anticipating a kiss. I will wait for the kiss.

Alan M Rogers

First scene: So *much* fluff. I love it. So much. I almost feel bad for Adora, not being able to join the cuddle pile. Inappropriate interaction with employees, but perfect family bonding time for the wife you don't know you have. Mermista being her normal 'plus one' makes perfect sense, and I love the tone of Mermista's participation. She's going to passive-aggressively have good food and mock people. I am here for petty Mermista. I hate that Adora has to deal with all that though, and her dread at facing it alone is heartbreaking. She has a lot of people in her corner, but there's not much she has to face on her own, because she doesn't have a partner. [[Catra was sure her mum wouldn’t mind her tagging along, but she didn’t want to cramp her style with her ‘empty nest’ friends.]] I also can imagine Catra not wanting to deal with her Mom's empty next friends. That would be - a lot. Just a lot. [[she read the latest book she had picked from Ms Grey’s collection]] Gotta wonder how often Adora just buys a new book and sneaks it into the collection, just for Catra. [[Adora would be going with Mermista. Catra didn’t really like that idea much.]] Nope. No. She does not like that idea, and even knows why, but both she and Adora are being disasters about wanting to be together. Torture. Pure torture. I am so looking forward to them being together. [[she wasn’t sure she could be trusted for a whole night to keep her eyes to herself.]] Bold of you, Catra, to assume you have been keeping your eyes to yourself. In Snows. At Ballet. When Adora comes home from work... Very bold. [[Adora was always so grateful for the help, like she never expected anyone to lift a finger for her.]] She doesn't. That's the worst part. Any of her people asked her for anything, Adora would move heaven and earth for them and berate herself for not doing *more* - but the idea anyone would help her is completely foreign to her. She treats everything anyone does for her like she's imposing on them. I blame Melody. [[they confirmed Catra’s measurements. Adora didn’t know them, but she did now.]] And I bet Adora turned ten shades of red during *that* conversation. Those little details you pepper in like that are *so* good - and show what a skilled writer you are. I know tidbits of craft get lost in the rush of 'OMG chapter!!* - but I see you, toiling away there. You also balance telling us what's happening to create the situation Adora is in with strong emotional invocation and without heavy info-dumps. It's *hard* to balance that, and you do it really well. [[Adora asked about removing the slit in her dress she was denied. Dee never listened to her when they had a ‘vision’. ]] Why do I think Dee's 'vision' here is 'make them kiss?' [[The idea of delighting Catra with champagne on the drive only crossed her mind once or twice.]] *Only* once or twice. A minute. Since Catra agreed to go. [[Nothing that came to Adora’s mind was appropriate to say to Catra]] Adora! No. (Well, okay. Catra *is* an employee, but - aww.) [[Catra wasn’t sure she could handle Adora looking like that and touching her.]] Given the tension that has built up between them, I can only imagine how intense that moment would be. And if that tension were to break, right before the gala? Yeah. That could be bad timing. [[Catra would keep a lid on her attraction for one night. She had to.]] 'Attraction' is doing a lot of heavy lifting in that sentence. And doubt. Much doubt Catra will succeed. [[Catra felt her breath catch in her throat at the reminder that one day, very soon, she would be gone from their lives.]] Oh. Oh no. Poor Catra. She doesn't *want* it to end, and she will miss them both so much. Not a thing she's ready for, at all. Nice work tossing that into the moment - great tonal shift to bring us back to the continuing angst and yearning. (Seriously. That was good writing.) [[Catra turned and offered her hand to Adora, who looked surprised by the gesture but took her hand. Catra smiled as she helped Adora to her feet, a generous amount of smooth pale leg slipping from the slit in her dress. Catra’s mouth felt dry suddenly and as soon as Ms Grey was in sight the flashing camera’s tripled, she was recognised.]] Catra being the one to help Adora out of the car is a nice touch - and an interesting choice. It's definitely something someone in the press would notice. It's a nice twist on the expectations. Also, Catra's eyes are not behaving, and it's hilarious. --- Catra is entranced by Adora and Adora is worried Catra is bored. Wow. Just - damn. You write them as disasters so well. So very well. Another small detail I'm in love with is how Catra purrs so freely around Adora, especially when she likes something. It's a really, really nice touch. [[Adora didn’t realise that her expectations of a good date were so low. Before Mermista, Adora would have been happy if anyone showed an interest in something that mattered to her.]] Oh, Adora. No. Your previous dates have been *awful.* That is *not* how you treat someone. Relationship, first date, going as a friend - *no.* Somehow, you have made me even *more* glad Catra is there for Adora. [[Adora had to admit that she was enjoying having Catra on her arm a little too much.]] 'Too much' is not the right phrase there, Adora. But again, her sense of responsibility and morality with Catra being her employee - it makes sense. [[Catra had no doubt that Ms Grey could achieve those goals but she worried for her. Adora needed more time to herself and with Finn, not less. Catra hoped that this future included more delegation and vacation time.]] Catra, you and everyone else who loves Adora agrees with this. You, however, stand a chance of getting her to do it. She doesn't know it, either. [[Her smile dropped immediately and her eyes turned cold as her face tightened.]] This was a great mood shift on Adora - the instant change, the instant awareness. The instant emotional shutdown. Powerful, for a single sentence. Really well done. [[Catra was protective and she knew Adora didn’t need her protection, but she deserved to feel it none the less.]] *This* is such a powerful sentiment. This is fantastic writing, and it shows just how well Catra *does* know Adora - better than Melody ever will. Melody's comment to Adora was artless and purposeful - designed to hurt and shame her. Fuck, that was cold. After *that* comment, I am sure Catra would believe *anything* people said about Melody. [[deciding that this beautiful woman needed a reality check.]] And Catra's 'fuck you no' button got pushed. This is going to be epic. [[“-that's the only way you can possibly think Adora isn’t worth ten times her companies wealth,” Catra was loosing the battle with her temper, not realising the embarrassing truths she was spouting for anyone to hear.]] Yeah, you did just tell *everyone* there you're in love with Adora. Somehow, I think Adora will miss the implication, but - to be fair - she just got confronted with her ex and brutally emotionally attacked in a public venue. And *that* comment from Catra - that shamed Melody to anyone who heard. And Melody knows it. Go Catra! [[I never want Melody to meet Finn]] No one does. She would hurt Finn to hurt Adora, and then she'd have to be killed. Hiding a body is a lot of work. [[Adora grabbed her by the waist and they were flush against each other and they both looked shocked.]] Neither of them mind, but they were both trying to *avoid* getting that close. This night is a *definite* shift in closeness, though, and not just because of the conversation between them about the matter of pay. [[Catra was embarrassed but Adora didn’t react the same, only seeming delighted by Catra’s enjoyment of the fine food.]] Nope - Adora is not at all embarrassed. That's her happy place - giving people things that make them happy. Seeing Catra enjoy dinner that much, especially after Melody, has to be a big deal for her. I love the way you show us that without us being in Adora's head. And Catra's continued enjoyment of the nice things Adora is able to help her access to is really nice - solid writing and a great emotional thread running through. [[“Seven…?” Adora said in a sad whisper and Catra looked at her, her eyes were already glossy as her stoic expression crumbled. Why does she look like she is going to cry? Why does the years matter? Wait…Finn isn’t even five yet.]] *Any* chance of empathy I had for Melody just *died* an ugly death. That means she was cheating on Adora for *two years.* What the fuck, Melody? She did that on purpose. And it worked. [[ Adora said, pulling Catra up and into her lap. ]] You doubled down. Oh damn. I didn't see that coming - at all. That's unusual for me. Well done. And go Adora. Cuddle your girl. [[They rushed past the paparazzi but it didn’t stop them snapping photos of the couple fleeing the party. Catra laughed and Adora joined her in giddy delight.]] Oh. *That* is going to be a story the next day. And Melody will be so happy she chased Adora away. I hope she gets hers by the end of this fic. Damn. (Also, when Adora's friends and family find out, Primus is going to need to hire Melody bodyguards. Folk are going to want a piece of her. A big piece.) ...that last paragraph is a doozie. Damn. This was just a fantastic chapter, and I am even more eager for the next one. The yearning is real. The torturous waiting is real. But the angst is coming, isn't it? --- Random Questions - What *is* Adora planning to do after Catra's year is up? Hire another nanny, or is Finn going to school?

Lisra

Squeeeeee. Also, lol @ the press.

Rinnii Art

Yay! Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yeah Primus is interested in Catra for her promising future in the industry. He likes to get people right out of graduation to mould. He wanted to know if Catra could be pressured into doing a thesis he thought would bring her more money. The way she turned him down so fast annoyed him because he didn't get to work his magic on her. He doesn't like people like that. lol. The gossip papers are so intense, but someone tipped them off so its always going to get out of hand.

Rinnii Art

LMAO

Branden Bull

Hooooly crap, things at the Gala both went just as well as I expected, but also worse. Like, I loved the beginning with the adorable fluff, and then Adora inviting Catra to join her at the Gala (poor Mermista, but your sickness helped further a greater cause!). And things were going great before and after that first bump with Melody, which was not so bad cause seeing her lose to Catra was great! But seeing Adora get so much courage and enjoyment from Catra being there, and Catra getting to enjoy herself and watching her trip over Adora was real fun. xD Honestly it so hard to believe that the two of them didn't break and actually kiss, but over all it was still so cute seeing them together! But then that revelation with Primus and Melody, FUCK! I wanna see both of them burn so bad! I can't wait for some comeuppance for them! I am very curious about what was going on with him and trying to talk Catra into changing her thesis... I can think of a few theories, and it was great fun to see his frustration at her shutting him down. <3 Also, fuck those papers, frigging gossip slinging crap. I am so concerned about how this is gonna affect Adora. She is already too hard on herself, and I'm scared she is gonna believe she needs to work even harder and take less time for herself to make up for this! Hopefully Catra and the fam can keep her from going off the deep end... Great chapter Rinnii! This got me all kinds of emotional, both happy and angry. xD I am just so excited to see what comes next, and how things are gonna progress between our two girls!

Sack of Trash

THAT BITCH

Beepboop

I will be rereading this chapter btw hehehe

Beepboop

AHHHHHHH THIS CHAPTER WAS SOOOOO AMAZINGGGG!!!! 🥳🥳🥳🥳 THE LONG AWAITED GALAAAAAAAAAA!!!!! Or should I say GAYla hehehehehehe UGHHHHHH MELODY IS THE WORST!!!!! I HAD NO IDEA SHED BE WITH PRIME BUT ITS SO FITTING!!!! I HATE THAT THE PAPERS GOT IT WRONG AND SAY ADORA IS THE SCANDALOUS TROUBLE MAKER BLLEEEHHHH!!!! Prime must own them too or something blehhh!!! AHHHHH CATRA AND ADORA ARE FRIENNNNDDDDSSS NOW 🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳 AHHHHH CATRA VIEWS THEM AS HER FAMILY AND DOESNT WANT TO LEAVE THEMMM!!!!! 🥰🥰🥰 AMAZING CHAPTER!!! I LOVE THIS STORY!!! AHHH AND SO MUCH ART FOR THIS CHAPTER TOO!!! Finn dozing/cuddling with Catra AND the Catra/Melody SHOWDOWN BUM BUM BUMMMMMMM!!!!


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