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[COMIC] - The Forbidden Treat
🕑 Added 2025-06-28 05:46:29 +0000 UTCHello Everyone!
There is a pdf format file with full comic about Fern on this post, so check it out!
I really did hard work there with this comic, i hope you will like it! Feel free to critique or giving advices, im open to any feedback in improving my content!
I'm planning on doing a schedule for my content during the month, especially strict schedule for comics. I think 4 comis for month(1 comic - 1 week) will do.
There also will be exclusive content, such as small packs of pictures of differenct characters(even NSFW) posted several times a week.
Thanks for reading, see you next time!
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Comments
ImOnShluck
Thank you so much for your feedback! I'm also really sorry that i made such mistakes in comic, i should've been more attentive!
SoftnessEnjoyer
I like it🔥 A couple of things could easely be improved. Page 3 and 4 are in the wrong order. Typo in page 14, should be fit and not fir. Also some other language nit picks here and there, for example in page 2, "approvance from master worth all the hard work" is not a correct sentance. There should be an "is" between "master" and "worth". I would suggest running your script through chat gpt or something before adding it to the pages. These are minor points, but very eash to fix I think. I really do like the comic. I like that she is goes back and forth between fit and fat. Would be fun to see them look for even more mana expensive spells in part 2, which only ensures her growth if she ever uses them😈
Tkillroy
👍❤️🔥🤤
