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Chapter 329: Final Abilities and Decisions - Markets and Multiverses

🕑 Added 2024-12-11 07:32:31 +0000 UTC

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Touch

Wholeheartedly agree! I say not only Author can get rid of redundant words, but making a longer chapter could create a sense of “continuity”, making it feel faster even with the same pace…. Not to say the pace shouldn’t be faster Not only the words, sometimes mentioning the same thing or don’t mention it at all would be better

swordmaster savage

I love this story, but sometimes it feels like every little detail is over explained and not much ends up happening chapter to chapter, thousands of pages in and we aren’t that many worlds ahead tbh

Arkeus

I'm glad they are aware they have to do as much as possible in each market trips, though I'm a bit wary of how they are proposing to do it here. Though of course the current plan is fine ish, the issue is a bit more meta. Basically I would assume the best way to go about it is => explore until clone is dead if Miria can't make more immediately => explore outside for a month to grab as much achievement as possible => come back and explore here even more. After all, the nursery other places seems limited to grade 3 in what you can buy, but it also has a lot of easy achievements to grab. If they push, they can easily get 1K+/day that way, which imo isn't negligible, and would let them be much more prepared when they come back here in a month or so, with higher grade stats and also ready to grab better abilities in the bed. Salia especially is uber screwed right now and somehow she isn't being given any achievements to help her out.

Touch

Propose Edit anything too complicated or “precise. There were limits to how small of a component it could work with” These are repeating, might be better to use “precise, meaning there were…”? Or get rid of the second sentence entirely

Touch

Propose Edit Even better, the space itself would repurpose itself to match the physics of each world. We didn’t need to worry about items falling apart because a new dimension didn't have atoms in it, or some other ludicrous problem. The factory would adapt to any 'minor' issues such as the laws of physics being totally different. “Even better”, the Double Even better, using “Even better still” for the second ones would be better

Touch

Propose Edit asked Anise, as she frowned “in thought.” Felix and I fell into thought. Not needed, she frowned already implies enough thinking/emotions, show not tell

Touch

Propose Edit Ability would create a starter kit “of materials to work with”, giving Felix a base of materials to work with Not needed


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