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[New story] Just like magic #1 [Harry/Emma Granger (Hermione's mom)]

🕑 Added 2024-01-30 22:01:52 +0000 UTC

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Cateagle

You might want to "fine -tooth" for other word derops as tehy can jar the reader.

Cateagle

Here's one word drop I alluded to earlier. "...Hermione’s dad somehow while she was fighting a war," should be "...Hermione’s dad died somehow while she was fighting a war,"

Cateagle

Having said that, it was a delightful story and I look forward to further chapters or sequels as the relationship between Harry and Emma develops further.

Cateagle

A very interesting story, but I believe there have been some words dropped from some lines and it needs a bit of editing.


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