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New Story - The Succubus Heart Squad
🕑 Added 2020-02-07 10:26:27 +0000 UTCLast update post I mentioned I was working on a new story. I kept it vague because it's an old story I started some years ago for Literotica's Valentine's Day story competition. Every year I break it out about this time of year to get it done, and every year I fail to finish it in time. To be honest, I thought it would be the same this year. After running late with the last House of Hellish Harlots release, I didn't think I'd have enough time.
Then I wrote 6,000 words on Tuesday...
So here it is, "The Succubus Heart Squad":
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-succubus-heart-squad
Piotr Kurtzburg is your average nerdy software developer. Normally, he doesn't get anything for Valentine's Day. This year he gets a surprise as a statuesque beauty wearing nothing but a longcoat over lingerie hand delivers a card and chocolates. Who are they from and just what is the 'Heart Squad'?
I hope you enjoy it. I'm also hoping I didn't allow too many typos to slip through. My usual editing process is to leave the work on the side for a couple of weeks and then go back with fresh eyes. As I was still finishing off the 1st draft on the day it was supposed to be submitted, I might have had to shortcut that process somewhat. So, it might not be as 'tight' as usual. It's one of those stories I might end up tweaking again when I come to put it into an ebook collection. Any feedback would be helpful to that end.
(There are sneaky hints to another one of my characters, but it shouldn't matter if you haven't read any of her stories - it's Valentine's Day, just enjoy the succubus orgy!)
House of Hellish Harlots
The short story took up most of this week (and it's technically a shorter week as I've pushed the regular update post back to Friday). I'm still tweaking the Portly Gentleman feedback code (I'm much happier with the new template) and trying to figure out a more efficient way to handle repeat visits.
I also had a really good idea for a new Harlot and in the process figure out a good way to make use of the Intelligence stat. The new harlot is a little Mind Flayer-y. Sometimes it's not always good to have high values in stats...
Thanks for your continued support. I hope you enjoy the new story.
- manyeyedhydra
Comments
Smith lfarrel
Wow! That was amazing! I don't know how you always manage to make a story feel so real! Send the heart squad my way next! XD
MaxBigfoot
That was a great hot read. I gave it 5 stars. Thanks a lot.
Many-Eyed Hydra
That's a fail on my part if the reader doesn't get a strong image in their head. :D I've had some pieces commissioned in the past and some of my readers have done the same. My main problem is I'm pretty bad at finding reliable and good artists. I was hoping to get something done for the Volumpula CYOA, but that fell through. It's something I should probably look into, as characters definitely get more attention if there is sexy artwork of them floating around on the internet.
Cirdan
Super happy you made it for the VDay deadline, really enjoyed the story!
Benjamin d'Entrecasteaux
Do you ever consider getting artwork done for your characters for a slightly better visual depiction, or leave it all down to the imagination of the reader? Because in this case, despite the fact I enjoyed imagining it, it was almost too fantastic to fully grasp what the squad looked like. 9.99/10 though, just wish it was longer (personal preference).
