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Revised Book 1 Chapters
🕑 Added 2019-12-22 23:55:05 +0000 UTC[UPDATE February 20, 2020: I've now added chapters 21 through the Epilogue.]
[UPDATE January 29, 2020: I've now added chapters 11 to 20.]
Hi folks,
I've been working on prepping Book 1 to release it as an ebook and paperback, and I have the first batch of revised chapters ready to go (chapters 1 to 10). There's no charge for this post.
The original "early release" chapters I posted were the fourth draft, so this revision can be considered the fifth draft. The book will likely be the sixth draft, but it should be reasonably compatible with the fifth draft.
The changes I've made are primarily to improve the flow and to clean up some awkward wording. There were also a few typos and a couple of very minor inconsistencies that I wanted to fix (e.g., Katrin should have already had a riding skirt when Corec captured her). And I changed Corec's equipment slightly. He now has a long knife for situations where a greatsword would be too awkward, and I clarified that his scabbard is detachable (it's not possible to draw a greatsword from a scabbard that's attached to your back or waist--your arms aren't long enough).
These revisions are also posted on Royal Road, for people who prefer to read there. I'll work on updating SOL as well.
If you read this version and notice any issues, I'd be happy to hear about them.
Per request, I'm including both PDF and HTML, but I'm still having trouble creating the HTML files cleanly, so let me know if you have any problems.
I'm currently planning to post a status update within the next few days, and then the next batch of chapters before the end of the month.
--Ivy
