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Chapter 341

🕑 Added 2021-11-22 13:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

One of which was the same glyph for fire lightning and eye--> same was what? I think that sentence ends a lil too early The other depended on their affiliation--> I think this sentence (directly after the above edit) needs some work too, I can guess what you're going for but it's really rudimentary. Vess... distracted by the hand, still some yards away [paraphrased] --> a paragraph above, you wrote that the first person off the boat was the hand, and yet it's Zara talking to Felix, and Vess having an aside we hear first, shouldn't the hand be the first person talking, both in a character way and with how the scene is set?

J B

Is this a setup for a .... Hand job?

DCRangeRange

Thanks for the chapter

Batelthda

Thanks for the chapter! [:D] I look forward to more of Felix!

Evan Zey

At this point I would think Hand be small fry.


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