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Chapter 122

🕑 Added 2020-09-28 02:08:13 +0000 UTC

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Alan

The story is dragging last 20 or so chapters IMO. Also, for the life of me I can’t see the logical connection for taking Evie with him to a secret meeting with a sorceress.

Alan

Please explain why the hell did he took Evie with him? For what reason? Hey, let’s take this chick to a secret meeting with a strong sorcerer without even telling her everything. The sorceress should be extremely pissed and rightly so. Honestly this looks like a character plot hole to me, makes no sense at all.

Impulsive Monkey

Btw, totally not a problem if you don’t

Impulsive Monkey

Are you ever gonna do romance in this book? Like I can’t really tell if you’re leading into something more or not

Sanairb

I believe it gets released after second lunch but before first dinner.

Sand Bear

We've had Mondays chapter, but what about second Mondays chapter?

Nicoli Gonnella (Necariin)

Thanks for the catch. For a reason that escapes my understanding, when I do my quick outlines I write in present tense. But the story is, of course, in past tense. Fixed it up.

I like Felix's dynamic with Evie. The easy banter between them flows naturally. That said, pacing is definitely dragging. An entire chapter just to travel to the meeting place which has been teased since forever. The journey was punctuated by conversation, half of which was repeated info we readers already know about, rest were tidbits that are interesting, but could have been brought up any other time.

Imran

Thanks! Caught these two: >imagine their easy they're >and notes the direction she's facing when the flinch happens It should be past tense, I think? (noted, she was, happened)

Kapelteta

I took it to be a mental note of Felix

lockx

There's a note to yourself in there about the name of the dwarf at the inn in full capitals


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