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Chapter 23: The Sap

🕑 Added 2024-08-27 18:04:50 +0000 UTC

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MangOwO

yes, should be 2. Fixed now!

Alexikon

in the last chapter did she not get 2 skill points? I only see 1 available

MangOwO

The bullying was more a societal issue than just the actions of some teenage girls. In a human school where magical talents are nurtured, being a half-beast with no magic didn’t sit well with certain people. She could have retaliated, but all the methods Lotte taught her were far too violent and... permanent, making her think twice. Additionally, the risk of getting caught in a society that had it in for her only further discouraged her. As for the, umm, accent criticism, I admit I’m guilty of that. It’s a bit of a game for me, playing with words I wouldn’t normally use in everyday speech, especially the fancier ones. The randomness comes from my struggle to integrate them smoothly. Thanks for the review and for your support, it really means a lot!

megahellreaper

So, I'll give my impressions so far, before getting into the interlude. First thing's first, I'm rather enjoying the story and storytelling her, it's not much of a mystery WHAT she is, we all know, but how come she is a dragon, who her mother was, whether or not her father had a tryst with a damned dragon or whether she's merely adopted(the new minion whose name I can't be bothered to remember probably has some information relevant to this) and what her relation to Lotte is. The adventure aspect has also been very enjoyable, though I am and have always been a sucker for the early parts of this sort adventure, so that's no surprise. Character-wise, I love every character we've met so far, but I can't help but find myself wondering why Jade wouldn't retaliate against her bullying considering how severe it seems. She doesn't seem the type to just take it lying down, but heck, maybe she did and it bit her in the behind, either way, haven't seen, won't assume. Now for the writing. This one, I have criticisms. Your english is absolutely stellar, your descriptions fantastic and your dialogue well done. The problem I have, and I admit it might be a matter of taste, to attempt to include some accent to the writing. To be frank, it's a whiplash for me every time you include a "blimey", a "codswallop" or a "blooming". It just... doesn't fit, in part because you ARE writing in perfect english, there's no indication of an accent half the time, then all of a sudden BOOM accent pops up. That, and the propensity to include all caps exclamations randomly would be my only criticisms so far. Otherwise, keep up the good work and we will watch your career with great interest!

TheGreatSako

...oh yeah. She thought herself a mere lizard when she woke up. Doesn't know what dragons are, hmm. Also, that was such a dumbass thing to do, I can see myself doing the same thing lmao.


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