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Chapter 58 - The Price of Our Choices

🕑 Added 2023-06-22 15:18:59 +0000 UTC

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Andrea Pozzi

Fixed, thanks :)

DANTE

I think Schemer is the Feat name, not a skill

Zed

all night x 2 looks like you forgot to delete the one before or after

Vamsi Yerraguravagari

I think schemer should be higher level or similar to orange considering he got +1 favor from it.

Story Time Compass

Thx! Personally I am not sure how the reflection of the story telling the color of the skill acquired here would weave itself in. Its kind of a drag that Patreon doesn't do colors but I will say, if it was to be mentioned, I would preferer an [Author's Note] at the end of the chapter saying what color it was. As it was, this "Poison Drink" Section of Chapters shows just how hard the MC worked to accomplish his goal, and rewarded promptly. Which I would say speaks to your writing performance as my line of thought while trying to guess the color of skill was (Red? > No... this was pretty hard || Yellow? > No... It seems pretty extreme considering there is only one Yellow being on the Island || Orange > Probably, better ask, just in case). Anyways this was, overall probably the best segment of the story. Not necessarily my favorite, but you really did well here.

Nathan Sto

I feel like assassination would be much harder to train than an normal orange skill. Does it only get experience from killing people? Also, what does the skill actually do? Is it some sort of mix between sneak, a poisoning skill, and a plan-making skill?

Andrea Pozzi

Yes. There was a mention of it but I must have cut while I was editing XD. You can see the colors in the pdf if you like them :)

Story Time Compass

Is Assassination orange?

Austin

Great chapter! I'm glad he is feeling bad about it. It's very human. Don't really enjoy sociopathic MCs lol. One correction I noticed. When talking about the storm he's walking through you said teared up the leaves and branches. I think it should be torn instead. Teared is like teared up from crying.

Kimberly

I think it was great that he was considering his actions. While I hope he maybe has a conversation with someone about it, I also hope he doesn't dwell. He is in such a unique circumstance as he is almost part kid and part adult. I can't wait to see him dive back into training and see what happens as he continues to grow!

nicolas

Thanks for the chapter :) and not had slept much the night before -> and had not slept much the night before Kai had already become more acquainted than he would like with the inhabitants of the jungle floor than he would like. -> Kai had already become more acquainted with the inhabitants of the jungle floor than he would like.

Doubledoor

Very sad vibes, its understandable, but still a bit frustrating to see Kai feeling this bad for killing such a rat of a person. TFTC!

Andrea Pozzi

Thanks for the comment, this chapter was even more difficult than the last to write. Glad I managed to convey what I had in my head on the page :)

Mohammed Sheekh

Very realistic, and the character development is off the charts 10/10 chapter, enjoyed every bit of it

Stephen Pearson

Thanks for the chapter!


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