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The Last Stand

🕑 Added 2025-03-14 03:30:01 +0000 UTC

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Kratos5628

Well let's start with the first one, Joren was just an informant he just provided a location. He does have extensive network in the hive which mainly consists of laborers and black market bosses. Second, he did not know any of the ascension stuff. He has clues about whereabouts of governor's aide, so he provided the info. Cassian used his telepathy to extract info from that henchman. Joren in the whole story only provided information and locations of the places he got to know from his contacts. Even extraction as it is open news among underworld bosses. I admit joren did felt like a plot device. But he is not exactly "know it all man". Again, this is my first fic. So, I did make mistakes but you live and learn.

Ikasuki

Your Jorden character feels less like a person and more like a author tool… I can buy that he has his ears on the ground and hear some of the thing going around. Cassian could use some of his brainpower to put 2 and 2 together but that is not good story telling the way you wrote him. He knew about the first summoning where who how what was said and everything that was already a bit much and honestly extremly suspicious… he knew about a second one and the ascension stuff which is even more ridiculous. And now in a different place ( without his usual contact, friends etc in an desperate situation and away from his norm) he knows about extraction amongst higher Arbites when cassion has been dealing in those circle and know nothing about it ? Well no this isnt good writing. You could have used his own perk of super memory and learning + better social interraction. You could have used the other perks of pattern recognition and instinct (which is basically another word for unconscious pater recognition) but no instead you ask the « I know everything character and deliver it on platter » it doesn’t feel great man


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