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Suddenly Laquine - Chapter 2

🕑 Added 2021-01-10 23:17:47 +0000 UTC

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Zmeydros

I'm trying to be a bit more vivid and artsy with the way I set up scenes. I've written a lot of poetry over the years and I want to be pretty sometimes with imagery and such. Also, I think I defaulted to being utilitarian in scenes, not really getting too detailed about what they looked like, but I fell lighting and texture and other stuff would make it more immersive and only cost a dozen or so extra words.

Zmeydros

For this series, I basically put myself in Elara's spot. I'm the sort that'll try to do the thing I'm supposed to help with even if everything is slanted against me. That determination she has to make it through her shift was really fun to write as a result.

Reid

Great dialog in this chapter! It felt very natural and was a lot of fun to read. And really enjoyed how seamlessly you wove even more world building into the descriptions and character interactions. Excellent setup to what will inevitably happen to Elara in the following chapter 👌 This sort of situation is my jam so I might be a touch bias 😆

Arkona Kothe

She's going to need a lot of willpower and a bit of meditation if she's going to make it through this evening unscathed! Excellent chapter. Can't wait to see where this goes!


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