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DSC: Seeking Lisa Page 02
🕑 Added 2023-08-17 12:00:07 +0000 UTC
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Harlock
Thanks for the feedback! I'll probably leave it like it is because people have different levels of eloquence IRL too.
Harlock
LOL
Dollmistress
Yay!!!! Guest-starring the green lamp that everyone knows from some random B-movie. :) I missed this series! One minor critique - "Pixie tells me you wanted to meet with me" is a bit clunky. You could have "Pixie explained you wanted to meet with me" or "Pixie tells me you wanted to meet with us", etc.
kurogetsui
*flashes a bunch of hand signs* "Rapid exposition dump no jutsu!"
