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V (Part 2 of 4)

🕑 Added 2023-03-03 17:00:07 +0000 UTC

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I love all of the characters styles 💜 the outfits are beautiful!

Chai

- Overdid it ➡️ overdo it - What if his it was like ➡️ What if it was like, - And then never does ➡️ And then he never does - Angie's line of speech after being hugged is a little awkwardly spread in the bubbles. I think you can get away with omitting "that" in "That I thought you forgot..." - Her phrase, "So I had a doubt" might be better stated as, "So I was worried..." - Where Hadrian explains he was sleeping, "Had a nightmare" could be rephrased as "I had a nightmare" or "Woke up from a nightmare to the..." - Helen, The baker from The Orchid retired recently ➡️ Helen, the baker from The Orchid, retired recently. - I never heard that one ➡️ I've never heard that one. (Or, "I never got that one") - Can you please tell me if there is really an ➡️ Can you please tell me if there really is an - That I swear it looked back at me as if ➡️ I swear it looked at me as if - The comma in Angie's remark about watching horror movies isn't needed. - Don't call me like that ➡️ Don't call me that Fun fact, "analysing" has two versions depending on which English you're using. The UK uses "analysing" and the US uses "analyzing." Both are correct, so use whichever! Just be sure to use that form for consistency. (I'm going to guess you've been using UK English, so I'll be sure to use UK spelling if the need ever arises.) And as always these are suggestions, use whatever you'd like or disregard at your discretion! ❤️