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III : A Familiar Stranger (1/3)
🕑 Added 2023-01-16 17:00:05 +0000 UTCBy now you should have noticed two things already: The first is that Hadrian talks to himself a lot and the second is that he enters in the car of random strangers.π
P.S.: III part (2/3) will not be up on next Monday (23rd January), but next Friday (27th January)
P.S.2: Any typos/corrections are welcome πββοΈπ
P.S.3: Donβt be like us, donβt enter in car of perfectly strangers. π
Comments
Chai
It's all good! I'm happy to help. π₯°
Chai
Also, when the stranger puts it together and exclaims, "You are the Duchess's son!" it feels a little wordy for his established speech pattern? It threw me for a second because I was expecting "You're the Duchess's son!" but maybe that's just me π
Chai
Don't get into cars with strangers, Hadrian! What are you doin!? XD Typo Time Suggestions: - "or to die" could be simplified as "or die" - "Look how tall you've got" could be "Look how tall you got" or "Look how tall you've grown" - Should there be a ? in the panel the old man offers Hadrian a ride?
