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Chapter 157. Second Mission

🕑 Added 2025-09-08 05:20:17 +0000 UTC

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Justin

I know I'm in the minority but the whole chapter feels off here. This is a common RR/progression trap so many authors fall into: trying to make something behave cute that shouldn't be. By the author's own descriptions Bennu has been around collecting wisdom for 10 THOUSAND years. He's experienced great tragedy, happiness, loss, you name it. There's several examples of Biggins describing to him that you can't treat it like a kid when it hatches its a primordial intelligence that's been accruing knowledge and wisdom since the egg was laid. Bennu briefly tells Adom how vast his experiences in the egg were. And here we are, with it acting like a 5 year old because its small and people like that. Giving it a vocabulary doesn't make it better. Bennu should have been giving wisdom and guidance fresh out the egg like was established. He shouldn't be slacking on his shapeshifting asking to go on combat missions with a toddler. He could be nice and cute to Ada, but not behave LIKE Ada. Now every interaction will feel cheap until the magical chapter its just suddenly combat capable and starts speaking like an ancient intellect.

mezeka

TFTC! Love the interaction!

BenjiVoid

1. I've lived somewhere with the toilet separate from the sink, but that's not common or obvious from the text. It feels like a mistake just mentioning going to a second bathroom. 2. Zuni is hardly better backup than a phoenix, he's defenseless. He could mention his large group of friends, like Sam and eren. 3. He also brushed his teeth before eating? And didn't rinse (his mouth was still foamy)?

Will Iam

Thanksfor the chapter, quick fix. little smile expending. Expending to expanding

John Doe

We will be eating good today!

buca117

Thank you! They'll be there when I wake up.

Ace_the_owl

2/6! The next two are in like, 3 hours? Then another batch, and another until I am done. Since I am editing them with my brother, this time, it should be right on schedule lol. Hope this will be enjoyable!


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