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Chapter 96

🕑 Added 2025-07-22 17:03:39 +0000 UTC

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ze96

I agree with what Danger Mittens is saying, but the protection detail also feels like a joke. He's repeatedly being attacked by a void-element user, but is mainly told to not be alone. Shouldn't he always have an archmagi watching him, hidden or not? The void-user is actively hurting people around him as well, how can the Synod and order keep passively watching? His and the other students abilities compared to the unknown entity might as well be on the level of kitten, why do they expect him to fend for himself?

danielnewwyn

Oh, I wouldn't have thought about addressing the staring into walls problem if you hadn't pointed it out. You're right about that and the confession to Celine. I'll add things earlier and rework his confession for him to just say something mundane and almost misleading instead.

Danger Mittens

Hey, I really like the novel. Your writing style is great, and the characters are super interesting. But I feel like the MC’s character hasn’t developed much. The side characters are more interesting than MC so far. He was gullible when we first met him, and he’s still gullible 95 chapters in. I don’t like how he keeps making the same mistake over and over: whether it’s going alone or staring into the wall. His life is on the line, and this incident with Celine shouldn’t have happened. I also don’t like how easily he confessed that the device is working to Celine. After all the buildup about keeping it secret, he just gave it away for almost nothing. Now, everyone on campus will know he has a working device, and I don’t see how that benefits him. The information he got from Celine could have been learned elsewhere anyway. Staring randomly into walls is something his mentor or the Archmagus should’ve corrected by now. He feels bad about people going out of their way to protect him, but he’s not helping them by repeating the same mistakes. It’s fine for the MC to be gullible or make bad decisions early on. But if he doesn’t grow from them, readers will start to get frustrated. Also, if it’s possible to take over the device, there should be more people targeting him besides the Void guy. I know it’s only been a few weeks in story, but I hope we start seeing more interest from other parties, not just the Void faction.


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