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Soul Taker: Part 1 (Chapters 1-4)

🕑 Added 2025-03-07 15:42:51 +0000 UTC
Soul Taker: Part 1 (Chapters 1-4)

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Steatoda

*salute* I have lots of love for EQ/former EQ players. And thanks for the feedback. So the idea is to use most of Rogue in this story. Transferring over the main internal conflict and Drawback eases this. The Drawbacks are just in-your-face versions of the conflicts that he needs to overcome. And they can be overcome, just like we saw with the Mary Sue in Star Jumper. Points for problems. The Relentless Dead charm resistance only applies to the undead raised by that Perk. When Tyson gets the power to raise the dead on his own, he'll control them with no problem (Book 2). He'll just need to be faster than the Drawback. As for why he wasn't buried... Good point. I suppose it would be easy enough to add in a paragraph of 'set dressing' so it looks like he was going to be buried when the undead started rising and drove off the gravedigger or whoever.

Fortunis

I like that the world is an EQ knockoff, but that start. Ooff. I really don't like the original drawback. It basically fucks him immediately because none of his earth knowledge means anything. It immediately puts him in the "im gonna die to goblins" category of "heroes." Which is basically, let's face it, immediately what happens. I mean he didn't even make it out of the summoning room. Then there's the entire graveyard thing. Why was his corpse the only one not buried? Also those drawbacks FAR outweigh the so called "perks" he gained randomly. All they did was waste the points he got screwed for and he gets no say in it. It doesn't even tell him when the System stops choosing shit for him. Don't get me wrong, undead MC's are cool. I love me some Necromancer stories. But even that he's fucked for because his undead are now harder to control if he does manage to end up with Necromancy as a power. The whole forced drain thing even means he can't let anyone touch him. Despite his "you don't look dead" perk. Gotta say i can't see where your going with this one.

Steatoda

That's really what this is. I want to be safe with how far removed it is from the Marvel stuff. It's hard to see the Rogue in the story because it hasn't come in yet. Next posting, you'll see the similarities, as it'll come into what was Rogue's chapter 1.

Fortunis

Just do what those guys that made the awesome Star Trek fan movies did when they got sued and change the names of everything. It's not the Federation it's The Republic or some shit. Same with character names and what not. People will still realize what you did but legally you'd be in the clear. You'd probably need more world/universe lore though. Not really sure how much of that you can use without being slapped for it.


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