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Interlude: White Sun’s Zenith

🕑 Added 2019-12-16 22:30:30 +0000 UTC

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Joseph Marcia

Thanks for the reply, I'm glad it all came through like that. Those were the exact impressions I was going for. It can be difficult showing growth from the inside, so this chapter gave me a chance to show how far Taylor has come. I keep forgetting to bring up the prosthetic. It's still there, all robotic and stuff, but now also a part of her and also with gold lining. I should probably mention that somewhere haha.

Joseph Marcia

Thanks. First one was intentional, though it's a bit of an odd choice so I don't blame you for thinking it's a mistake. I'll fix the second one though.

Impasse

Couple of typos, “That would be, not the person you need to worry about.” should probably be “I'm not the person you need to worry about.” and “They old hat!” should probably be "They're old hat!"

Tersin

This was great. Show's what the rest of the Team has been doing, shows them succeeding and bad ass even as it's clear their struggling to do that. Taylor got her 'Big Goddam Hero' moment, as did Ritz, both of which were fun and spectacular. Then Taylor and Raven get to reaffirm their place as team power houses. I was just giddy through the whole thing. It's also gratifying to see the progress Taylor has made from the outside. From inside her head it's hard to see, but from Artemis' point of view it's pretty clear that she's settled and beginning to come into her own. Very much looking forward to Taylor acting with more confidence moving forward. Still wondering if she has a prosthetic and if so why given her new nature though.


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