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Chapter 50: Bonds

🕑 Added 2018-07-09 05:23:09 +0000 UTC

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Joseph Marcia

Robin is upset that Taylor killed three people (and also low key that she ditched them and didn't share her plan, which makes him even more upset because he realizes it's hypocritical).Superboy is still in angst over M'gann breaking up with him and is dealing with it as well as any other teenage boy.

Joseph Marcia

Thanks, fixed

Fyre

Typo: unspoiled version -> unspoiled virgin

Varisis

Im really confused about what all the strife going on in the team between people is about

Joseph Marcia

I'm glad you like my interpretation of the characters. To me as well, Raven coming into the more 'motherly' roll was strange thought at first, but it felt natural in the writing. M'gann was going to be a 'team mom' as it were, but between Raven and Artemis, I felt that Raven would be much more understanding about and able to handle Taylor's issues. Hence why Artemis was playing lookout. Of course, no one out-bats the Bat family. Thanks for the corrections. Fixed

esotericist

Pretty rough place Taylor's in here. Raven being the one to do the primary of Taylor's well-being is vaguely surprising, but it makes a lot of sense in retrospect. She has a lot of experience in coping with having an... unusual nature, and was drifting in the direction of wanting to coach Taylor even before this latest event. I probably shouldn't be surprised that Raven of all people worked out a way of following a Planeswalker. Robin being trouble here is very unsurprising; he's bordering on 'insufferable brat' a lot of the time in the source material. Consequence of being a very young but exceptional badass. Too much ego, not enough emotional maturity. Fantastic work still, thank you for your effort, and I do hope you're managing to contend with what's going on in your life okay. Some minor proofreading niggles that stood out to me: > Raven scoffed. “I don't you both around for the scintillating wit, do I?” Presumably should be "I don't keep you both around" > Raven glanced up at me, but alloud I just said, “How long until the cookies are done?” Should be 'aloud'.


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