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Chapter 49: Moirai

🕑 Added 2018-06-18 04:10:05 +0000 UTC

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Joseph Marcia

Exactly, she lost her body control for mana control based on the ability she already had due to her spark. Of course, there are a few upsides will get explored later, for now though, I'll go back and make sure that second trigger is explicitly clear in this chapter as well.

Joseph Marcia

Thanks for the advice, I'll clear up those sections both here and on the eventual SB post. For the decompression chapters, I was planning on having at least two, one interlude to show what's happening in the background, and then one, oddly enough, where Taylor and Raven do talk. ;)

Matthew Rogers

Second triggering with a focus on controlling Mana?

Tersin

The pacing over all is a little short, maybe. But over all I liked it. The only thing that I could see that really need expansion was why she couldn't use magic (And I could even sort of follow that. Things are really different inside her after all), and then why she could (Which I'm totally lost on. Something to do with her parahuman power? I think?). But otherwise it was a reasonably satisfying conclusion. Really looking forward to the decompression though, maybe get Raven and Taylor to actually talk about their situations? My excitement for this of course has nothing to do with my shipping goggles. Nothing. At. All.


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