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Chapter 72: After Party

🕑 Added 2020-11-22 23:34:35 +0000 UTC

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Thanks for the chapter on a good story

yep, a Champion's congratulations!

KristofferXxXxX

Congratulations on becoming Hogwarts’ Duelling Champion Harry! Wow, looks like it is about to become quite erotic in the next chapter :3

Yea, I would have loved to go more into details, but some people would start complaining so I had to rush through most fights. so in the start, it was only common spells to make everything fair, but Flitwick removed that since all four of them come from respectable families. And sure, Harry and Cedric will be working together in the tri-wizard. I plan to make some changes with the new school in the mix of course.

cathia

this mini arc was interesting but left me with a lot of dissatisfaction, since those fights were too scarce (all those rounds felt as if somebody was describing how excellent the visuals for the film were, to his blind friend, sure maybe they were great but how could the blind person enjoy them, if he couldn't see them?) and they went too fast (all the described fights just kind of ended, before they could start, sure it was better than making the duels stopping the middle, so the fighters could make an exposition, of how awful their childhood were, or something, but if you describe how prolonged a fight was then make it prolonged, if it was a boring fight, then make it boring but in a way that Harry for example starts to focus on something else, so the scene on itself is interesting), moreover I still don't know how Harry compares to other students. Sure I know he can defeat wizards specialized in long-range spells in the melee fight, but I want to see him use those supposed 250 spells in both their intended way and the way they could be used by a creative battle specialist. Like it was interesting when he used that glacio spell to unbalance his opponent in the first round, it showed that he knows how important the surroundings are in the fight. Also, did he have some kind of strategy for the whole tournament, by for example deceiving everyone, that he knows a bunch of long range spells, to surprise everyone with close range combat in the semi-finals (since you know, everyone was watching different fights, and I am sure that many were interested in, how The Harry Potter coped with the fighting, especially since he should only knows the common spells, what with being raised by wizard-hating muggles), or did he lazily just throw a bunch of powerful spell combinations at his opponents? Also, it would be nice to make Cedric more of a sort of Harry's rival in this mini arc, like their bloodlines affecting their thinking or something, because making Harry rudely think about Cedric as a pretty boy for no apparent reason, just doesn't make sense, especially if you look how Harry in both the books and the films, ended not only with that kind of minor rivalry, but also looking up to Cedric after his death.


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