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Chapter 97: Silvi's First Day of School

🕑 Added 2021-07-06 23:45:59 +0000 UTC

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fbt

I thought it flowed well and was easy to read. In fact, I was thinking exactly that when I got to the note.

Javahound

The flow felt fine to me. Obviously, each character’s conversation can be more/less formal than another, and the narration can be slightly different, too. A good sign that it worked (for me) is that I didn’t think about the flow until I read your note…the note that happened right after the cliff hanger.

Talen Drake

I didn't notice at all. Thinking about it more I usually miss a not over a didn't. So contractions may be better for clarity. I often find myself going back and readings a sentence that seems to contradict the next sentence.

自由

I am super tired, but it seemed fine to me. The relationship with Silvi was well done. I wonder how she will be grown ip.

Kevin Caffrey

I admit I didn’t notice much of a difference, but the chapter was easy to read.

Kenneth

i enjoyed how the chapter was written

TerrestrialOverlord

good chapter...Silvi is cute but I really want more Derek development chapters...brandi, the village dungeon, and city lord mc-shitingface also.


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