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Chapter 33: The Next Day

🕑 Added 2020-12-03 21:16:01 +0000 UTC

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SunriseCV

Thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix soon.

Stephen Pearson

Thanks very much for the chapter, always look forward to them:-) Can't wait to see the training, though I guess that won't be until next Thursday. Couple things: Rayna, why are you not at a higher level[.] should be [?] you should [by] Meditation -> buy In the conversation about Meditation and Identify, it went from talking about Identify to: 'Derek watched as both of them put on a sad expression. “I’m guessing neither of you thought the skill was worth the point?” He asked. Rayna nodded. “Yes. Now I wonder if it will still be worth getting it.”' ...because Identify was the last topic, this was confusing as it implied they were talking about Identify, which we already know Rayna has. Easy fix: 'I’m guessing neither of you thought [Meditation] was worth the point?'; alternately 'the Meditation skill' Thanks again!


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