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All Right! Fine! I Will Take You! – Chapter 41 – Rematch: Round 2

🕑 Added 2022-06-12 17:59:09 +0000 UTC

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Agrippa

I completely agree that characters should always be front and center, but perhaps I should work a bit more on setting up the scenes. Too many of my stories feature people talking in their living room... About the cellphone, this had been too many years in the making, and neither of them felt like sharing their moment. Maybe it's a bit selfish of them, seeing how other situations have been handled, but I think it fits them, and, well... character first and all that. I've got a pretty good idea about how the date will start and how the chapter will end, but the filling's still up in the air, so I may very well take up some of your ideas. Iroha certainly would like to try on some provocative cosplay for her "Senpai."

Pope Yoda I

This chapter was excellent. You hit Haruno's role as a tease pretty solidly. I enjoyed it's presence in an otherwise slice-of-life setting. I think a good, solid scene is defined more by the characters present that can give it a unique flavor than by the setting itself, which you nailed. Kind of surprised a cellphone wasn't involved, given their notable role in other similar scenes earlier in this fic. Genuinely curious what the next scene involves, assuming you don't skim over the date. There aren't terribly many unique settings in the anime/Light Novel series, so I imagine you're going to have to start branching out. Maybe Akihabara, both as a side-quest for Zaimokuzo and for Iroha's budding role playing preferences? Good place to also run into a friend/relative/little sister who will realize her big brother has grown up into a total degenerate.

Agrippa

Truth be told, I'm a bit burned out in general (life's been a bit stressful), but this story has always been, even at its most frustrating, one of my favorite things to work on. Still, I think I've come up with a way to give it a satisfactory ending, so let's see what I manage over the following months.

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I thought you were kinda burned out on the main story, so this is a pleasant surprise. I equally enjoy reading the side stories / AUs!


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