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[Tree] Chapter 64: Black Blooded

🕑 Added 2023-03-08 01:14:00 +0000 UTC

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Alexandria Clarke

There's like 5 instances of "heavens" that should be changed to "Heaven's"

Alexandria Clarke

I take +rep as payment on RR for my edits if you're feeling so inclined: > He was breathing in heaven intent and breathing out his morphed will. > He was breathing in heaven's intent and breathing out his morphed will.

Gopard

Thanks for the chapter! Uh Oh, I'm guessing Diana also tried to "forcefully push herself" somehow but her degraded spirit roots backfired? Perhaps she was unconsciously jealous that both Ash and Stella grew so strong so quickly and she doesn't want to be "useless"!

X Blade

Thanks

Robert Apgar

Her beast core usage is probably backfiring right now. Hopefully its as simple as the impurities getting forced out and it just looks really bad.

XKARNATION

Some valid criticism, I will strive to not do that again. Thank you.

Demian Buckle

Thank you for the Chapter.

X Blade

Huh?

EsZeus

I have to admit, and criticize: That you are telling the exact same thing from 2 perspectives so many times is getting annoying. If you do this with some really nice and awesome things to build up momentum? Awesome. But if you use it for every little thing thats newly happening? Annoying. Please, don't do this. It makes your story more boring and you fill out more chapters with "fillers". A bad decision in my opinion. And such "little" details like this as I described will lose the interest of readers the more similar things you do. A lot of smaller mistakes will suddenly then be a big one. Cheers! Thanks for the chapter :)

Ethan Barrow

Thanks for the chapter!

Vorquel

Dang it, Ashlock, you don't speak science. You speak the theories of the scientific institution. SMH my head.

Andrew

Thank you!

Kain01able

OH JESUS. Quick, someone do some Xanxia bullshit! What would Larry do without one of his loyal subjects!?


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