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M.S. A.

I have read many different novels over the years, and scifi is a hard genre to pull off. You succeeded and added litrpg fantasy elements to it. It's cohesive, it make sense, it widens as you read more. I think this story will age like fine wine. I recommend taking some more time with each chapter and making them longer. I would prefer a longer thought out chapter while you are healthy compared to short bits and POVs. It'll help you organize for other ideas you have as well. I find with simple stories, shorter chapters are better, complex and large stories require long chapters.

ShadeByTheSea

I agree with a lot of others, POVs are great as long as they follow some rules(these are mine but everyone is different) - Don't break up the action(ie don't insert one unrelated to the fight in the middle of a fight scene) - aren't in long arcs (ie one or 2 in a row, unless it's between books) - don't excessively retell parts of the story

Krimo

Dude, you've hit a niche with your story. I believe that you'll naturally gain readers over time despite the lackluster release. I love this story and wholeheartedly hope it continues. Also the POV would be great as long as they're not to far off from being relevant. Thank you for writing.

Alysyn

I adore the Spaceship story! Sorry it’s not as popular because it’s so much fun, and actually very unique. I hope you find the balance that works best for you, but I truly hope you keep this world going. Any point of views you put in always add to the whole, so I trust your judgement.


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